GT Outline: Audience is the Utah Education Association which consists of teachers and school board administrators in Utah. It will be some of the same info as the argument paper but much more focused to the teachers to excite and motivate them to help me start the program.
I. Intro: Open source story of niece who takes advantage of aunt
A -What is adultolescence
II. Why is it a problem?
A-Prevents adult kids from becoming independent and responsible.
1-quote from Dina Mcmillan
2-cycle of human nature
3-parents can be of help
B-Hinders parents retirement prep and their relationship
1-"Kippers"
2-$5000 extra cost per child per year
3-Judith Bernstein Quote
C-Puts Strains on child/parent relationship
1-parent role to landlord role
III. Solution
A-explain idea of high school class and what it would include
IV. Call to action-Ask for help and support
Monday, December 7, 2009
Monday, November 23, 2009
Genre Translation Invention Work?
Hi Jessica,
Hope I did this right...
Audience:
-School Boards in Utah
-I know this audience has the students best interests in mind.
-I'm guessing they have little knowledge about the topic of adultolescence. They would probably all know someone who is experiencing it but may not realize the problem it has become, and may at first assume that it is not something they can help since it is about kids who have graduated from high school, which is as far as they normally worry about. They may not have that much interest in the topic at first until I address the problem in more detail. They would need to know the statistics of adultolescence today and how it is increasing, and the negative effects it is having on the kids, the parents, and our society. Their values and beliefs are probably consistent with producing well adjusted and contributing 18 year olds into the world, and they know strong families and parents who have helpful tools to teach respect, honesty, and responsibility and apply consistent discipline make the classroom a better learning environment for students and teaching environment for teachers.
Purpose:
-I want to communicate to them that this is a problem and there is something we can do to help. Then I will explain the idea for a solution and how the school system will have to be involved to make a difference.
-I would like for my readers to be kind of skeptical and maybe not that interested at first to being like, "Wow, I never realized this is becoming such an issue in our day. I think this plan could really make a difference!" OR at least be thinking about the plan and if it could work.
Plan the Essay:
-The main ideas are that adultolescence is a problem, tell why, what is being done about it that's not working and what we can do about it.
-My thesis would be: Adultolescence in America is a growing issue as it is negatively effecting adult children and their imperative character building, parents and their retirement,family relationships, and all in all, our society, but if we start working at small levels we could make a huge difference.
-I don't think arguing the definition would be necessary.
-I can argue that this solution, if applied, will only have great results. Even if not everyone participates, those that do will benefit and word of mouth will get out that the classes are really helpful for parents and even for students in high school to feel more confident to leave the nest.
-I can incorporate the research into my paper by taking a few examples from each area of my subtopics to back up why this is a problem.
Hope I did this right...
Audience:
-School Boards in Utah
-I know this audience has the students best interests in mind.
-I'm guessing they have little knowledge about the topic of adultolescence. They would probably all know someone who is experiencing it but may not realize the problem it has become, and may at first assume that it is not something they can help since it is about kids who have graduated from high school, which is as far as they normally worry about. They may not have that much interest in the topic at first until I address the problem in more detail. They would need to know the statistics of adultolescence today and how it is increasing, and the negative effects it is having on the kids, the parents, and our society. Their values and beliefs are probably consistent with producing well adjusted and contributing 18 year olds into the world, and they know strong families and parents who have helpful tools to teach respect, honesty, and responsibility and apply consistent discipline make the classroom a better learning environment for students and teaching environment for teachers.
Purpose:
-I want to communicate to them that this is a problem and there is something we can do to help. Then I will explain the idea for a solution and how the school system will have to be involved to make a difference.
-I would like for my readers to be kind of skeptical and maybe not that interested at first to being like, "Wow, I never realized this is becoming such an issue in our day. I think this plan could really make a difference!" OR at least be thinking about the plan and if it could work.
Plan the Essay:
-The main ideas are that adultolescence is a problem, tell why, what is being done about it that's not working and what we can do about it.
-My thesis would be: Adultolescence in America is a growing issue as it is negatively effecting adult children and their imperative character building, parents and their retirement,family relationships, and all in all, our society, but if we start working at small levels we could make a huge difference.
-I don't think arguing the definition would be necessary.
-I can argue that this solution, if applied, will only have great results. Even if not everyone participates, those that do will benefit and word of mouth will get out that the classes are really helpful for parents and even for students in high school to feel more confident to leave the nest.
-I can incorporate the research into my paper by taking a few examples from each area of my subtopics to back up why this is a problem.
Tuesday, November 17, 2009
Paper Outline
Adultolescence Outline: (still need to fit in right sources at right places):
I. Intro.-Open source story
A. Thesis
B. Road map
II. Def. and background
A. Def. of Adultolescence
B. Explain circumstances in which my paper is not talking about
III. Adultolescence prevents adult children from responsibility, hard work, and independence.
A.
B.
IV. Adultolescence hinders parents ability to prepare financially for retirement and begin a new phase in their relationship.
A.
B.
V. Adultolescence puts strains on family relationships by changing the def. of a parent to the kids landlord or housemaid.
A.
B.
VI. Explain faulty solution- Setting numerous and very specific ground rules ahead of time.
A. Strong point- Could make a great experience for all if it is done this way.
B. Weak point- Rarely does this happen, and even if it is done with enough specifics, rarely does everyone follow it.
VII. My solution- The real problem is that the majority of parenting skills in the home for children before they turn eighteen is not efficient enough in this society for adult children to go out on their own and thrive. My solution to work to get grants from the government to fund going into school districts to convince them how crucial and beneficial it would be if make parenting classes were available, and maybe even required, for different age groups. (One for toddler years, pre-kindergarten,kindergarten-2nd grade, 3rd grade-6th grade, 7th grade-9th grade,10th-12th. One class would teach parents how to best relate and discipline teenagers, and one class for the kids(required to graduate) would teach about budgeting and finances, how to apply for college, resumes, life skills. There would be a few classes they could get extra credit for if their parents came. Those classes would teach parents how to best help their graduates to move on with courage and independence.
A. Strong Point-Could really make a difference if it was actually applied.
B. Weak Point-Not sure if school districts would go for the idea or if grants would happen. Also, would people participate?
VIII. Closing paragraph
A. Sum up thesis
B. Closing Quote
I. Intro.-Open source story
A. Thesis
B. Road map
II. Def. and background
A. Def. of Adultolescence
B. Explain circumstances in which my paper is not talking about
III. Adultolescence prevents adult children from responsibility, hard work, and independence.
A.
B.
IV. Adultolescence hinders parents ability to prepare financially for retirement and begin a new phase in their relationship.
A.
B.
V. Adultolescence puts strains on family relationships by changing the def. of a parent to the kids landlord or housemaid.
A.
B.
VI. Explain faulty solution- Setting numerous and very specific ground rules ahead of time.
A. Strong point- Could make a great experience for all if it is done this way.
B. Weak point- Rarely does this happen, and even if it is done with enough specifics, rarely does everyone follow it.
VII. My solution- The real problem is that the majority of parenting skills in the home for children before they turn eighteen is not efficient enough in this society for adult children to go out on their own and thrive. My solution to work to get grants from the government to fund going into school districts to convince them how crucial and beneficial it would be if make parenting classes were available, and maybe even required, for different age groups. (One for toddler years, pre-kindergarten,kindergarten-2nd grade, 3rd grade-6th grade, 7th grade-9th grade,10th-12th. One class would teach parents how to best relate and discipline teenagers, and one class for the kids(required to graduate) would teach about budgeting and finances, how to apply for college, resumes, life skills. There would be a few classes they could get extra credit for if their parents came. Those classes would teach parents how to best help their graduates to move on with courage and independence.
A. Strong Point-Could really make a difference if it was actually applied.
B. Weak Point-Not sure if school districts would go for the idea or if grants would happen. Also, would people participate?
VIII. Closing paragraph
A. Sum up thesis
B. Closing Quote
Thursday, November 12, 2009
Argument Paper Invention Work
Audience:
My audience probably won't have much info on this topic because it's usually something that just happens and families just accept rather than research about before it happens. I talked about their values already, but their assumptions might just be that this is what a good parents would do for their child. I think they need to know some ideas of how to make it possibly work if they choose to let their kids stay or come home, but even better, help them be independent out on their own, and that they aren't bad parents for encouraging kids to do that.
Purpose:
What I want my audience to begin with is just that this is an issue that is happening but that it is just what you do because you are family. What I want them to see at the end of my paper is that if they are going to let their children live with them, there are a lot of things to lay out and talk about so that everyone is on the same page and so that the kids are still learning a lot of lessons that they need. However, the main point that I want them to see is that setting ground rules and everyone keeping them is ideal but rare so the best and most healthy thing for everyone is to create a space away from each other where everyone can grow like that stage in their life should allow.
Essay:
The main ideas or subtopics I will be incorporating are adultolescence is 1-keeping kids from learning characterisitics for a contributing citizen like responsibility, hard work, and independence. 2-It hinders parents from being able to work on creating a quality retirement financially and stable spousal relationship, and 3- it strains parent/child relationships by changing the definition of a parent into the adult child's landlord or housemaid.
I can argue that my position is valid because of the lack of maturity in adult kids now days, and my solution is going to give great results for kids becoming adults. I think the bad that will be avoided is strained relationships, a generation that is unprepared and unfit to be future leaders, and a retirement community who will not be as drained financially.
My audience probably won't have much info on this topic because it's usually something that just happens and families just accept rather than research about before it happens. I talked about their values already, but their assumptions might just be that this is what a good parents would do for their child. I think they need to know some ideas of how to make it possibly work if they choose to let their kids stay or come home, but even better, help them be independent out on their own, and that they aren't bad parents for encouraging kids to do that.
Purpose:
What I want my audience to begin with is just that this is an issue that is happening but that it is just what you do because you are family. What I want them to see at the end of my paper is that if they are going to let their children live with them, there are a lot of things to lay out and talk about so that everyone is on the same page and so that the kids are still learning a lot of lessons that they need. However, the main point that I want them to see is that setting ground rules and everyone keeping them is ideal but rare so the best and most healthy thing for everyone is to create a space away from each other where everyone can grow like that stage in their life should allow.
Essay:
The main ideas or subtopics I will be incorporating are adultolescence is 1-keeping kids from learning characterisitics for a contributing citizen like responsibility, hard work, and independence. 2-It hinders parents from being able to work on creating a quality retirement financially and stable spousal relationship, and 3- it strains parent/child relationships by changing the definition of a parent into the adult child's landlord or housemaid.
I can argue that my position is valid because of the lack of maturity in adult kids now days, and my solution is going to give great results for kids becoming adults. I think the bad that will be avoided is strained relationships, a generation that is unprepared and unfit to be future leaders, and a retirement community who will not be as drained financially.
Annotated Bibliography #5
Bachman, Teri. (Fall 2002). Parents as Partners. UC Davis Magazine.
This article explains in detail about how parents are helping children so much more than they should as they go to college. Administrators at UC Davis are seeing parents so overly involved it's hindering their growth in responsibility and independence. The number of parents attending freshman orientation has increased and its the parents asking most of the questions instead of the students. They are calling the school asking questions, helping there kids pick a major, and which classes to take, making sure their living situation and ability to do homework is just right. This article gives another definition of Adultolescence which is also important. It is "Parents were staying involved in their college students’ lives, hanging on to their roles as decision makers, problem solvers and safety officers. "and “overgrown kids [who] seem content to enjoy the protection of their parents as they drift from adolescence to early adulthood.” Parents can be very helpful and supportive, but doing everything for them is taking the responsibility off of the kids to have to step up and learn the stuff for themselves. That's what makes strong adults.
Quote 1:
An expert on stress and coping, Aldwin also notes that the last 20 years have seen a preoccupation with stress. “There have been literally thousands of studies showing that stress is bad for people, including children, and parents got the idea that they needed to protect their children from stress, to take over if things got a little rough.”
Protection not only from stress but from any form of harm has been an overarching concern of today’s parents, notes an article in the September–October 2001 issue of the higher education journal About Campus.
“Today’s parents are going to unprecedented lengths to avoid their worst fear—that harm will befall their child,” wrote author Karen Forbes, director of counseling services at Lafayette College in Easton, Penn.
Quote 2:
To be sure, parental involvement, if excessive or inappropriate, can be a problem. Parents who are too quick to step in don’t give their children an opportunity to develop coping skills or the ability to handle their own problems.
Young people who are not held accountable for their mistakes but are rescued from messes of their own making learn no lessons. And sometimes, in the rush to help their own children, parents forget about the rights of others involved in a situation. “Parents may be supporting their son or daughter at all costs, while not realizing how their child may be impacting the community,” said Diane Russell, associate director of student housing.
I could use one of these quotes or part of one to bring in the point of how parents are aiding and enabling adultolescence.
Student Choice- Open Source
I was thinking I could use this story as a beginning hook maybe?
"My wife’s cousin recently moved into my mother-in-law’s basement because they were unable to afford the condo they had purchased. So they are renting out their condo and living rent free as the husband finishes up his last semester of school. However, they seem to be taking full advantage of the situation as they are not helping buy food or pay for any of the utilities. They even went as far as to have cable installed in the house (which my mother-in-law is completely against). They don’t seem to be saving any money as they are always coming home with new clothes as well as having breast augmentation surgery. "
Extra info:
She is 65 yrs. old and divorced
They did not write up a contract or set any guidelines because she didn't feel she could impose that on them.
The nephew is now done with college but they are still living there.
By Doug Young, 11/12/09
"My wife’s cousin recently moved into my mother-in-law’s basement because they were unable to afford the condo they had purchased. So they are renting out their condo and living rent free as the husband finishes up his last semester of school. However, they seem to be taking full advantage of the situation as they are not helping buy food or pay for any of the utilities. They even went as far as to have cable installed in the house (which my mother-in-law is completely against). They don’t seem to be saving any money as they are always coming home with new clothes as well as having breast augmentation surgery. "
Extra info:
She is 65 yrs. old and divorced
They did not write up a contract or set any guidelines because she didn't feel she could impose that on them.
The nephew is now done with college but they are still living there.
By Doug Young, 11/12/09
Tuesday, November 10, 2009
Annotated Bibliography #4
Zoellner, Tom. (August 27,2007) When Adult children Return Home. Third Age Magazine.
This article talks about Bill, a father who went from his daughter being gone to moving back home and how it has tried his patience in this new relationship. He feels he has gone from being father to landlord. It talks how the have to realize she is now an adult and have to try and treat here that way. It gives statistics of men, their age, the the percent who are living at home, compared to 1970 and how it has increased by 15%. The article explains how some parents emjoy the company but children that come home are usually coming home for a hard situation and that already puts stress into the relationship and maybe even worries the parents into thinking they did something wrong. It seems to intervene in the parents developing a new relationship as they are alone again. He realizes he needs to treat her as an adult and also set some guidelines for her but hasn't done it yet.
"The time when children leave the house is also when long-married couples begin to reevaluate their relationship as husband and wife, said Bernstein. Children who return can throw this process off-track."
"In spite of the fact that it's your house, if you decide to share it with them, you better give them some space," he says. "They have their own ideas and agendas. But you also have to set some limits. You can't let them walk all over you."
These are both quotes I can use to back up my claim as well.
This article talks about Bill, a father who went from his daughter being gone to moving back home and how it has tried his patience in this new relationship. He feels he has gone from being father to landlord. It talks how the have to realize she is now an adult and have to try and treat here that way. It gives statistics of men, their age, the the percent who are living at home, compared to 1970 and how it has increased by 15%. The article explains how some parents emjoy the company but children that come home are usually coming home for a hard situation and that already puts stress into the relationship and maybe even worries the parents into thinking they did something wrong. It seems to intervene in the parents developing a new relationship as they are alone again. He realizes he needs to treat her as an adult and also set some guidelines for her but hasn't done it yet.
"The time when children leave the house is also when long-married couples begin to reevaluate their relationship as husband and wife, said Bernstein. Children who return can throw this process off-track."
"In spite of the fact that it's your house, if you decide to share it with them, you better give them some space," he says. "They have their own ideas and agendas. But you also have to set some limits. You can't let them walk all over you."
These are both quotes I can use to back up my claim as well.
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